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Thea's avatar

Next line: “ it could be worse, I think. Don’t you?”

Jo Paoletti's avatar

Hmmmm. Good thought, too many syllables for this style. Maybe I need to break the rules sometimes.

Thea's avatar

Not sure what style you are seeking….

Jo Paoletti's avatar

It’s a form of tanka 5-7-5-7-7 or 5-7-5-7-5 I am still working on it.